First storyboard draft. The point of the scene is not discovering that the characters are puppets. At this point of the story it has already been established. Ratcliff and Lieutenant Percy are Flora's toy puppets. The scene starts off with the puppets on a table, they are arguing. Suddenly Flora pops behind them and they both freeze (like in Toy Story). She has her arms crossed, meaning she is not touching the puppets. She stares intensely at them, waiting for them to move again. Ratcliff is trying to hold his breath and Lieutenant Percy tries to stay in balance. Eventually though, they both fail and get busted. Flora screams I KNEW IT! while pointing her finger at them.
Hey Tea! Changing this idea from a 3-person to a 1-person scene was very clever! Plus adding the puppets. The idea works well in terms of keeping it simple regarding the characters.
ReplyDeleteYour story board looks great, I like the close ups of the characters to emphasize them all concentrating
I recommend having a shot of Flora before she pops out from under the table, just to establish the character in the scene as it seems a bit random at first.